Jasmine Hart

Thanks Navita. :) Eeep,a little bit behind... Section Three: Endings Poem Twenty-One On The Cliff I refuse to come with you and watch the cliff face eroding, and sigh like ...

Hi, I really enjoyed the idea behind this. When I clicked on it I expected it to be detailing a catastrophe so I was pleasantly surprised. I'm not sure about ...

Thanks a mil Kylan! Poem Twenty Or, Why This Whole Thing Is Completely Ridiculous *submitting*

Poem Nineteen Consider *submitting*

Poem Eighteen Dinnertime I like you because you feed me. This time it's a dinner invitation. I'm not used to standing on ceremony while I am sitting and eating. You ...

I love this one. Your imagery is great, especially the first stanza and "when she uses her fingers as a comb, she thinks she's going bald." The last line is ...

Poem Seventeen Lunchtime *submitting*

Poem XVI Dust My lampshades are getting dusty, grey furred like past-dying flowers (darling, bring my lilies back). Why won't it rain? I am past being ignored, I am the ...

Poem XV Undispute "It was like this when I bought it, as soon as I opened it I saw the crack and I want to exchange it. I swear it ...

Hi, You handle the form really well. It flows nicely and I like how you kept the same rhyming pattern all the way through. I'm not sure your choice of ...

Poem XIII Finding My Feet White as the drawing board save for deep blue channels, but I would hope they are slightly more golden now that they are not going ...

April 6; I felt that "rainbow diamond studs" was too much but I love the imagery in the rest of stanza one. I don't think you need "I want to ...

April 12th; I think that the first stanza is a bit slow, I may start with the second as I think the imagery is much stronger and the whole thing ...

"On A New Ship" I really love this. You handle the form beautifully and your imagery is great, especially; "Learning affection is like learning knots: in the beginning, every shape's ...

Poem XII The Rain It has finally begun to rain.The whole square is deserted, just me and twelve other street vendors hauling away our too-present wares and my lilies are ...